My Dad
My Dad has chocolate brown hair, and ocean blue eyes. He makes all the money in the house. He always wears long pants and a short sleeve T- shirt. He wears glasses that are oval shaped turned sideways. He has peach coloured skin and has a little mole on the side of his left cheek. He bikes to work every day even if it’s pouring down with rain or absolutely windy. My dad has a big shed in the back of our garden all to himself. One thing that my dad loves to do is buy lots of technical bits and pieces and make things in his shed like building speaker stands so he can stand his speakers on them and making tree huts for us except the huts are on the ground instead of up a tree. One thing that does get on my nerves is when dad turns on his music really hard out that it tunes the whole neighbourhood. That is really annoying. But the good thing about my dad is his beautiful scones they’re the best in the whole world, he probably adds a special ingredient that makes them taste so good. My dad is special to me because he gives me warm hugs.
By Nathalie LC13
Year 6
My self assessment: I think I did well by putting in the right puntuation, and great descriptive words.
Great writing Nat. You've given me a really good picture of your dad here. You need to put in paragraphs every time you move to a new sub topic to be writing at Level 3.
ReplyDeleteI think I could've done better at my self assessment because i could've said that the assessment was about my writing and to say what my next learning step should be.
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